If Only Bloggers Could Write Like the Pros
I have followed three links, to three diferent sites, to this AP story, which begins with this line, "A gun-wielding cartoonist dressed in camouflage entered The Miami Herald's building and demanded to speak with an editor Friday, prompting an evacuation of employees, police said." At none of these sites is there any further mention of the fact that the intruder is a cartoonish. He's not identified and there's no explanation of how they know he's a cartoonist.
Now, I realize I'm just a blogger, not a professional newsman, but even so, it seems to me that if you're going to drop an intriguing identification like that into a story it bears some development. If it's not worth explaining, leave it out.
Now, I realize I'm just a blogger, not a professional newsman, but even so, it seems to me that if you're going to drop an intriguing identification like that into a story it bears some development. If it's not worth explaining, leave it out.
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